This article is about an AAU basketball coach who stood by his student who was accused of robbery. The coach was there for the student and supported him.
http://www.cincinnati.com/story/opinion/columnists/krista-ramsey/2014/03/29/krista-ramsey-desales-market-robbery/7071067/
"He's the guy who puts money on your phone card so you can call him from juvenile detention. And the guy who always takes your calls.
He's the guy who for the last two years has opened his home to you when you hit a rough patch with your family."
I liked these lines because it contains a lot of diction and syntax. Anaphora is present in these lines. The sentences start with, "He is the guy". The anaphora really makes the coach look better. Repeating, "He is the guy" makes the reader believe that he is a rally good person and it makes us believe all the things that are said in the example. Also, the sentences are medium in length. Most words are casual and low in these lines. An example is when the text says, "when you hit a rough patch with your family." The casual diction helps us understand better what the author was conveying. It is a better way to say when you don't get along with your family. The combination of all these elements emphasize the fact that the coach was always there for for the student. Instead of directly saying that the coach was a good man and was there for the students author shows this through his diction choices and examples that were provided.
I think that that the writing style of "Coach stands by kid charged in DeSales Market crime" is unique and can be related. That style is reflected in most of her writing. Ramsey starts out each article or column with something that the reader could relate to or start with the story in the readers perspective. He gives the reader something to think about. An example in Coach stands by kid charged in DeSales Market crime is, "I couldn't tell how much information you were absorbing Thursday morning as you were led into Courtroom 108 at Hamilton County Juvenile Court. It probably took most of your concentration just to walk in those leg shackles. Still, you probably saw that your mother was there, and your aunt. Your attorney. Co-defendant. A magistrate..." The beginning two paragraphs draw the attention of the reader because she puts the story in the readers perspective. This really improves the quality of the article. Another example is in, "For better Vision, Kids need more time outdoors". The text says, "You see it all the time. Your teenager at the dinner table..." This quote shows that the author wants the reader to always be involved so that they don't lose focus on the essence of the article. Ramsey wants the reader to relate to it. Finally an example form the last article, "Super Bowl QBs score points for great style" is "Whatever magnificent things". Whatever magnificent things Peyton Manning and Russel Wilson do on the field Sunday at the Super Bowl, some of us appreciate what the two quarterbacks have done off the field all year. That is, helping to bring back the art of dressing well." We once again can relate to this. We can see a pattern as we examine the articles. The pattern or relation is that the reader could relate to it.
Questions that I have for the author:
1) How do you choose the stories you write about?
2) How and when did you develop the style of writing you use?
3)What inspires you to write?
I found this article very intriguing, I like how you included syntax terms that we used in class to convey the authors writing style. I like the use of anaphora by the author because it emphasizes his point about how important he was to him.
ReplyDeleteIt was a cool idea to incoorporate questions for the author.
ReplyDeletelike how you were able to put in your thughts about the authors writing style
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